Sunday, 6 May, 2007

YOU n ME n The STARRY SEA

Tell me what you see
when you close your eyes

I see the stars in the open skies
I see everywhere,in the darkness,
there are lights

Tell me what you see
When you close your eyes
Don't you feel me here in your heart tonight

I feel you
I feel me
I feel us beneath the starlit sky

Tell me what you see
When you close your eyes
Don't you sense like an angel inside

I see,as we lie beneath the stars
I realize how small we are
and
I see the lights of paradise
Behind the back of fireflies.

Tell me what you see
When you close your eyes
Don't you think the moon has eyes

I see the moon and I see the stars
I see us among the sparks
The stars tell a story of everything and time
and
They tell me that you are mine

I see so many sights unseen
I feel so many feelings unfelt
Is it you or is it me ?
or is it just us beneath the starry sea...

10 comments:

Amrita Sabat said...

wow man............amazing writing.........

i simply loved ur style of xpression......
:)

keep it up.

nirvan nanda said...

this was 1 is gud..nice

P.S-i xpect u to be brilliant!

Tejal said...

well i wnt lie..am surprised wit this poem.. its enchantin.. really liked it.. yea.. even i think bout da sky da same way.. its such an amazin feelin.. oye..listen.. u've started writin seriously really nicely ya.. :P
//Is it you or is it me ?
or is it just us beneath the starry sea... // - gochhhaaa! :P care to tell u who u're referin to?? :P
n nirvan..i disagree a lil wit u.. its not self depricatin..its bout acknowledgin da universe n givin it its due.. ever stood under dat endless sky n wondered how v're jus a mere speck compared to it?

KAMONASISH AAYUSH MAZUMDAR said...

yes the only thing u hav been doing nirvan is geing sarcastic to me all the while thanx for tht;...y dont u nirvan tell ppl abt"STARRY SEA" wala convo n how much "WILD IMAGINATION and NOTHING ELS"I HAV ?
do things change wen girls comment ? ? ? ?
btw UR LINK SAYS "BIGGEST SHOW OFF I HAV EVER KNOWN" thanx for tht !!!!
newayz so ppl wat do u think " beneath the STARRY SEA" in my poem means.................lets get the verdict here

KAMONASISH AAYUSH MAZUMDAR said...

THIS IS WHAT YOU WROTE [i think u mean that all that u r is thinking is either real..or just fake..
starry sky or starry sea vry well suits here for "wild imagination and nothing else"]

THIS IS WHAT I REPLIED BACK
[poems mostly rnt literal...they r trascending in nature n yes full of imagination ..wild or otherwise...which has "nothing" n evrything n all things tht cum in between tht bro...thts wat poems hav always been about...and as far as my guess goes they vl b until we breath our last....n real n "fake" is all in between our ears my dear frnd hahahaha.......]

dont say u didnt say tht now ?

n yes change my link in ur blog to "THE BIGGEST SHOW OFF I HAV EVER MET" plz again !!! u shudnt change it coz i askd u to or made u do it....so watevr it is plz change it back to tht......ok....i m serious here not kidding

TWINKLE PATTNAIK said...

its gud!! Mr.so called new found POET (lolZzzz)
n dis tym plZzzz dont brag :P

i mainly lykd d following lyns:-
'i see everywhere,IN THE DARKNESS THERE ARE LIGHTS'
'i REALIZE how SMALL we are'
'i see us among the SPARKS'

u knw wat 'starry sea' means to me....n now for dat verdict..i think "beneath the STARRY SEA" in YOUR poem means....""beneath THE SKY"":D

Tejal said...

@nirvan- Ahem.. well i guess i really missed out da sarcasm out ther.. n to tell u da truth.. it was pretty rude u kno.. wen u lik introduce sumone sayin he thinks too much of himself.. dats lik bein point blank rude n nowher funny :P
i dunno wat u kno bout aayush..but certainly..he's not da way u described him.. milk washed morality?? wat u talkin bout? lol.. its more of a i'm-insultin-u-dude-on-ur-own-blog-u-kno type of a comment.. sheesh! i dont agree wit ur this 'point of view' either!
yea u can add my bloglink on ur blog sayin- She thinks too much of herself n her friends.. :P
but.. no hard feelings buddy.. eh?

nirvan nanda said...

lstn kamon i have said it before and i am sayin it fr d last and final time.

watever i wrote outdere on my blogspot was jst fr fun.i thght we were too gud frnds to let dat ninny issue create a discomfort.

may be dats were i went wrng.

and regardin my coments i beileve i
wrote dat as a part of the frndly argument[which i thght] we were havin.

if at all in the process in my subconcious mind i ahve hurted u.
i deeply apogolize fr dat. i cant say anything else.

and yeah tejal m no nerd.watever i wrote as i have said jst coz i thght kamon as a close frnd and meant absolutely nethin at heart.
so u can lay it on me

have fun

KAMONASISH AAYUSH MAZUMDAR said...

and they lived happily ever after..........;)

plz dont rebuke remarks in my blog...!!! for wat so evr reason!!!
feel free to express urself...after all thts y we r here ryt ? evry1 has the right to agree or disagree.

n its not wrong to have a healthy argument...(ps:remember i said "HEALTHY")

nonetheless i m sorry if i tool things too seriously but no more remarks on this arguments here and no more things said or to be done on this piece of writing....tht is for the pp who has already commented (fought) on this poem.

KAMONASISH AAYUSH MAZUMDAR said...

and then PEACE PREVAILED for ever after.........:D